A post by Mary Fan |
now, so when my turn came to do an EEK last month, I had literally nothing. Since then, the life slump has kept slumping, but at least I managed to beat a few thousand words out of me (the motivation/productivity seems to be returning in abrupt waves).
So here, for your consideration, are a few pages from my new project... that disastrous ball of insanity I have no business writing but can't stop writing anyway. It's a YA magical realism about six modern-day teens from different backgrounds whose lives bump into each other in unexpected ways.... Here's one of them, an aspiring opera singer named Rae (this is actually the start of Chapter 3, her first POV chapter)
So far, the fuck it side was winning.
She reached across the narrow
twin bed—less than half the size of what she had at home, but whatever—tucked
her purple sheet over the corner. Straightening, she felt her bra strap slip
off—again.
The tiny, single room was
stifling in the June heat, and the building was so old, there was no AC. Still,
she breathed more easily here than she ever had anywhere else. Fireflies danced
around her as they always did, though in the daylight, many mistook them for
the gross kind of bugs. If only they’d stick around long enough to see how
magical they could be.
“You sure about this, sweetie?”
Mom looked like she was literally about to clutch the string of pearls above
her sweater set. “Home’s only ten minutes away, and—”
“Moooooom!” Rae dragged her
voice out. “I’m living on campus, and that’s that! So deal with it, okay?”
She’d been dreaming of attending the Silver Star Creek Summer Arts Festival since
she was in kindergarten, and living on the Rexford University campus was part
of the experience. She wasn’t about to let Mom
take that from her.
A whole summer of nothing but
music and fellow young artists and independence—it was like a dream come true.
And Rae was certain that hers were about to. The festival—which brought
together aspiring young performers from across the country for two months of
intensive training with world-class mentors—was breeding ground for future
fame, and talent scouts knew that. They flocked to the end-of-summer showcase
that exhibited the best of the best, and lots of greats had gotten their start
here. Rae was the kind of operatic soprano that could make audiences gasp and
weep, even though, as a teen, she’d barely begun to develop her talent. Imagine what’ll happen when my voice
matures.
Surely, the scouts would notice
too, and she’d get invited to all sorts of conservatories and young artist
programs around the world. This was the start she’d always hoped for, that
she’d been working for since she’d started taking voice lessons at age three.
She’d been watching other opera singers triumph on stage for as long as she
could remember.
She’d always known that
someday, it would be her turn.
“Remember, we’re just a phone
call away.” Mom placed a hand on Rae’s shoulder. “You got the list I sent you,
right?”
Rae made a face. Mom’s lists
were always full of nitpicky crap, like what Rae should and shouldn’t eat or
what hours she could be out without an adult chaperone and other Mom-ish stuff.
“Relax, honey.” From the
doorway, Dad chuckled. “She’s sixteen, not six.”
“Yeah, and I’ve got an audition
this afternoon, so I don’t have time for your fussing.” Rae crossed her arms.
“Go home so I can practice.”
“Wait, you have an audition
already?” Mom frowned. “I thought the program didn’t begin until Monday.”
“Not for the festival.” Rae
rolled her eyes. “Arthur Theater, remember? They’re staging a new opera about
World War Two, and they have open auditions for the chorus.” The community
theater specialized in undiscovered talent—both on and off stage. Growing up in
an artsy town like Rexford, she’d always been surrounded by fresh ideas on the
cusp of becoming something great. Now that she was old enough, she could
finally take part.
This time, it was Dad who
frowned. “Wait, you want to do an opera and
the camp? Are you sure you can handle both?”
Rae didn’t dignify that with an
answer; she simply lifted her brows and angled her mouth in an expression that
said it all.
She’d find a way to make
everything work, and nothing would stop her now.
4 comments:
Thanks for the sneak peak, Mary! I like the concept you've presented for the novel. I think what you have here is well written and it draws me in as your writing usually does. The only comment I can offer is that Rae comes across as a major brat. If that's what you're going for, then you nailed it. If it's not, then you might want to dial down the attitude toward the parents. Or add in some sort of empathetic feelings or at least respect toward them. She may only be 10 minutes from home, but it's pretty unfeeling and cold of her to tell her parents to 'go home'. Maybe this is just the mom side of me reading -- I know if my daughter talked to me the way Rae did I'd probably drag her back to the car and not let her stay at camp! But again, you may be going for the major brat with push-over parents. I did like her reaction to her dad's question about the opera and the camp - that told me she was ultra confident in her skill and abilities.
LOL! Yeah she is something of a brat :-)
Thank you so much for critiquing!!
I totally feel you on the life and writing slump. Blahh! But congrats on forcing the words out. I know how hard that can be. I really like Rae and already find her to be a sympathetic character. Working at a college, I actually know students who go to campus 10 minutes away from their parents and make it work, so the concept is definitely realistic. I don't really have any nits. Maybe you could name some of the artists who got their starts at the Arts Festival? Other than that, the writing is smooth and it seems like a great start/3rd chapter of a story. Good luck with it-- and the slumps! No shame in it. I think we all go through it once in a while!
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